tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1320330205885166658.post5719146576012077442..comments2023-09-06T05:23:17.083-07:00Comments on Dom's Animation blog: Replacing the Roots of the storyDomantashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04537408521058885177noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1320330205885166658.post-81277415932162903902011-10-13T12:06:09.160-07:002011-10-13T12:06:09.160-07:00rememeber I was saying you seem like you could be ...rememeber I was saying you seem like you could be character designer. Maybe a comic artist?Yolantelehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11529111695910945888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1320330205885166658.post-9303960606984876642011-10-13T06:26:45.630-07:002011-10-13T06:26:45.630-07:00Hi Domantas,
Well I think this story has just abou...Hi Domantas,<br />Well I think this story has just about the right tone - danger, but plenty of hope. As it stands you have a very complete story, with a definite beginning, middle and end, which is great for a film pitch. I think though you may need to make a few tweaks so that it fits the ongoing series model. I think the growing up of the hero could be done through flash backs, with the action and focus kept in the present, for the main story plot. And since the paddle weapon could be a great and fun item for him, I think it should not be the mcguffin for the series arc - you would only ever see it in the very last episodes if it was. I think that it may be better to have him have this early on in the story, and that he uses it to overcome the true task of ending Neptunes reign, through various escapades or tasks. It would be a very useful weapon against Neptunes creatures. <br /><br />Regarding the sidekick Gab, i think it maybe better if (and the audience)is initially unaware of her role, so that you can play up the humour of her character. As it i, she is more of a mentor role, albeit a vulnerable one. Perhaps, when a phoenix is reborn, they forget everything about their old life and this one is a little accident prone, to increase the comic value.Justin Wyatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00102510350311150592noreply@blogger.com